tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post8837712891092502149..comments2023-09-24T08:59:42.175-05:00Comments on Powder Burns & Bullets: #FridayFlash - The Last DanceStephenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-40516598139869603742014-09-03T22:36:12.601-05:002014-09-03T22:36:12.601-05:00I agree, Katherine. While dialogue gives you an in...I agree, Katherine. While dialogue gives you an insight into a person's background, the heavy use of slang, or chopped sentence structure, doesn't indicate a lack of intelligence. Some of the most wicked people on the street can still dance circles around a man/woman with a framed degree.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-47784720195793642482014-09-03T22:33:55.651-05:002014-09-03T22:33:55.651-05:00Me too.Me too.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-87097060855240208502014-09-03T22:33:41.234-05:002014-09-03T22:33:41.234-05:00In the end, actions do say it all.In the end, actions do say it all.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-26971209001179552642014-08-30T19:30:43.111-05:002014-08-30T19:30:43.111-05:00Excellent illustration. Lonnie'll be spending ...Excellent illustration. Lonnie'll be spending the next several weeks wondering what he did that was so terrible, and blaming what happened on all women around the world, and probably half the men too, I'm sure.<br /><br />I really liked the narrative voice here -- the characters are rural, but they're not stupid, at least not necessarily. As someone who grew up in a rural area, I appreciated the distinction.Katherine Hajerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08270232675026751342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-24072601470579760532014-08-27T14:02:02.924-05:002014-08-27T14:02:02.924-05:00I'm so glad she finally decided to keep walkin...I'm so glad she finally decided to keep walking.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-65053065522488442782014-08-27T12:36:52.961-05:002014-08-27T12:36:52.961-05:00In my world there would have been a knife. It neve...In my world there would have been a knife. It never ends well. But this ending worked out perfectly for the character of Juju. I can see her doing that. She won't talk much through her words but her actions, when she is ready, say it all. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13096021087395266714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-85313217953921048312014-08-23T11:54:24.380-05:002014-08-23T11:54:24.380-05:00I won't deny you that. People like him don'...I won't deny you that. People like him don't learn the easy way.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-63885184306347511062014-08-23T09:53:04.099-05:002014-08-23T09:53:04.099-05:00he got off too lightly... he got off too lightly... Sulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-10930751735969613892014-08-23T09:26:20.487-05:002014-08-23T09:26:20.487-05:00Thank you, Helen. I try to make them real, even do...Thank you, Helen. I try to make them real, even down to the way they talk. Some of the times, I succeed; other times, not so much.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-73224608325643942392014-08-23T09:24:24.011-05:002014-08-23T09:24:24.011-05:00In a way I agree with you, Steve. He deserved to h...In a way I agree with you, Steve. He deserved to have one upside the head. I'm glad she didn't, though. She can live with herself this way.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-69379739725911338942014-08-22T22:35:43.749-05:002014-08-22T22:35:43.749-05:00Wow I agree with Steve she should have waited till...Wow I agree with Steve she should have waited till he was asleep and then landed him a good one! See how believable your characters are, I'm talking about her as though she was real! Good writing Stephen!Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1064125998898504251.post-69293014465068407812014-08-22T17:03:37.602-05:002014-08-22T17:03:37.602-05:00What a life, I reckon she could have waited until ...What a life, I reckon she could have waited until he was sleeping drunk, then left him a goodbye note with a baseball bat.<br /><br />A hard-hitting read Stephen. The interaction between these two characters is so believable.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.com